Peer Review of Colin Kaepernick and the First Amendment

I think you have a strong introductory paragraph that provides a good foundation and background into your topic of Kaepernick and the First Amendment. Your thesis statement becomes a bit lost since your first three paragraphs feel like general introductory statements. The flow of the paper is very uniform and comes together nicely. Something to watch out for is that you overuse ethos throughout your paper, and reference it directly in every sentence that it appears. What I mean by this is that it feels like you think your audience does not know what ethos is, and you re-state it multiple times. You use that same technique for every rhetorical device you analyze and it becomes repetitive and nuisance. Try to explain in depth how the author uses ethos or pathos, rather than simply stating an example of it. The issue you have here is the opposite of mine. Many of your sources look at people who agree with Kaepernick, but to strengthen your paper you might consider finding sources that disagree with his stance. Your conclusion is strong, but since your thesis is pretty well hidden, it does not feel like you connected back to it. Another thing to add to your paper is what audiences your sources are trying to reach as well as how they do this. You reference it some with Fox but you could take a more in-depth approach to it.