Peer Review of Raising the Minimum Wage

The introduction to your essay is very well thought out and put together. Some things to watch out for are repeating phrases and awkward word choices. A few of your sentences seemed to be one right after the other and say the same thing. Another point is to improve your thesis by making it more specific to what you want your paper to be about. It seemed at some points that you started with one idea and then it evolved into something else by the time you got to your conclusion. You have many strong examples and they support your sources well. There is not much analysis of the rhetorical devices like ethos, pathos, or logos. Including more examples of ethos and pathos would be beneficial, or taking the examples you already gave and analyzing them further. You do a great job of showing the intended audiences and how the sources accommodate the audiences. The sentence structure in some areas tend to be run-ons and in some cases choppy, so try to be careful to avoid that. I feel that your conclusion could be improved with more evidence about what you learned from analyzing your articles as well as expanding further on your thesis. Overall you do a great job framing your argument as well as providing a strong background to the topic of raising the minimum wage.